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Her eyes where glazed over and I could see the universe reflected in them as she stared up at the sky in its darkest hour. Her dark blue eyes looked almost black in the near pitch darkness and the pattern of her dress was getting lost in the grass. I could just make out the pearly shine of drying tears on her face as I tried to think back to the moment when they first fell. There was no change in her heart beat, I know because I almost fell asleep to the rhythmic beating nor did her breathing change as I felt every inhale and exhale as I rested my head on her chest.

As if reading my mind her soft voice broke through the silence that was steadily growing louder as morning approached. "I'm happy," she said "so happy that all I can do is cry." I didn't know what to say so I said nothing as I could feel my heart swell with love and pride. The shy, lonely girl I met 2 years ago was now a strong independent young lady.

I heard her take a deep breath as we watched the first layer of the night change to a dark grey. The sand was about to run out. The clock was about to stop ticking. It was my turn to sigh deeply, inhaling the cool damp air and the faint smell of lavender from her hair. I sat up and looked at her still lying on the grass with eyes closed. I slid closer to her and took one last long look at her to keep forever in my heart.

I could see her lips begin to tremble and see her closed eyes shut a little more tightly knowing she was trying to hold back more tears. "Don't cry beautiful, everything will be alright, you'll see, after all memories last forever." I said as softly and sweetly as I could as I held back my own pain.

This was the moment I loved and also dreaded, knowing I had done my job and now had to say goodbye. Swallowing back my own private tears and ignoring the familiar sting behind my eyelids and the burning that was slowly growing in intensity in my throat.

I let a few moments go by to allow myself to calm down and collect strength. I looked up at the sky and as I watched the first few rays of sunlight lighten the sky I knew it was time. I took a deep breath and with all my strength I focused all my attention away from the tingling forming on my fingertips that was quickly spreading over my hands and arms.

When I looked at her again she was already looking at me and in that moment we smiled softly as we curled into each other's arms and with all our strength we held onto each other as tightly as we could.

At the very last second I kissed her forehead knowing as our grip loosened she would open her eyes and I wouldn't be there, but in her memory I would always stay and that was more than enough for me, her imaginary friend.
I really enjoyed writing this short story. I never had an imaginary friend as a child but my little sister did and with her help I hope I created a magical atmosphere filled with love and hope.
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my gosh... that ending!!! it's heartbreakingly poignant! 
an imaginary friend... or a character in a dream, the way i see it.
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CodyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
This is amazing. So beautiful written. You can feel his love for her and the love she returns. I have an imaginary friend and love him. He keeps me sane. It's my way to vent or cry. Best friend I've ever hand ^^ But this really is amazing.
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foopfooper Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
That ending was so beautiful it made me cry.
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VanyilaChoco-chan Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
I haven't experienced feeling that kind of love, but it certainly felt like my heart was being squeezed when I read the end.

This is so beautiful, I don't even have enough words to describe how beautiful this is.
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axxerr Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
this story could not have been written better. i first felt a sense of peace, as if i was lying in a field were nothing can harm me and i could just lie there all day. then i could easily feel as if i was on the verge of tears. i could also relate to being emotionally attached to... well i wouldn't call mine imaginary friends. i take the fictional characters i wright about and imagine them both in their worlds and in mine. i feel what they feel, i think what they think. but through that i found this story to be MUCH more relatable and enjoyable then any other love story i have heard/read before. thank you and keep up the good work.
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axxerr Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
i hope the fact that i am 13, and that i have never felt these feeling, does not make the following comment any less significant.
 
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sabletigers Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
That was very well written. Tears came to my eyes just as I approached the end. It was sad yet sweet and I loved the way you presented the character's emotions, thoughts, and surroundings. Plus you have great describing skills and imagery. Thank you for the wonderful story :)
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wlewis92 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That was awesome!!
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caatalexis Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014   General Artist
This is so sad, and adorable. Actually, it really reminds me of the song One of Repetition by Nami (www.youtube.com/watch?v=eU8ixn…, which is about the same thing - a boy likes a doll and imagines she comes to life, but one day gets a girlfriend and the dollgirl disappears. It makes me cry every time, as did your story. Actually, in your story, at first I thought that the girl was dying, but the guy being imaginary was just so cute and sad... Congratulations on the well-deserved DD. T.T
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rynq Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
I still have imaginary friends, but I like to the characters and pretend that's all they are
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runty Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Student General Artist
Just so soft, warm and beautiful.
It reminded me of all the special guys in my life that I felt spent time with me in my dreams too, under a real sky...

Thank you for writing this. :heart:
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NatPortman Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Professional
So beautiful!
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courglas Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014

I know you won a DD and all, and that's probably the only reason why I am here to see this, but that being said, I think it'd be a lot more moving if instead of focusing so intently on the imagery they are surrounded in, focused more on the memories they shared.

Even if you've never had an imaginary friend, it's not that hard to 'imagine' as it were, what kind of things you may have done as a kid that made sense to you at the time, but as an adult may have seemed ridiculous. For example, I remember when the movie starship troopers came out, me and all my friends ran around the playground at my elementary pretending to be a squad of soldiers taking out giant alien insects with our state of the art weaponry. I think most of us "played pretend" when we were kids growing up, and if you have too, you could pull on that as a reference.

If you focused more on the memories shared, I'm sure you could even get people who've never had an imaginary friend like yourself, crying by the time you made it to the last line. If you need a movie for reference, you could maybe check out the film "Drop Dead Fred" as the entire movie is about a grown up girl, who meets her old imaginary friend, and how she finally grows up from her childhood, late in her adulthood.

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cassannder Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
I disagree. I think it's a lot harder as a writer to describe fundamental details of the physical environment than the person's thoughts and memories. Thoughts and memories tend to flow readily from the writer's stream of consciousness and risk making for a very dull read. To really engage your readers, you must make them see the setting down to its details, this is what makes a story real. Unfortunately, I think in this story the physical setting was a bit cliched (and so were the emotions and thoughts); I think the creativity came with the overall idea, and that's what scored him the DD).
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courglas Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014

I'm a writer, I should know, and no it's not "harder". There are different styles of writing just as there are different styles of art, and if an artist for example only draws cartoons, they have not explored the technicalities of drawing live people, that could greatly improve their technique.

As far as using imagery, no, it's actually pretty easy, since all you have to do for imagery is think about what physical qualities of the world you find you'd like to describe and then describe it. It's much harder to convey and describe feelings, or personal philosophies without sounding like a fool. So in fact, the truth of the matter is in comparison to describing things we cannot touch, see, or often explain, looking out your window and writing that down is much much easier.

That aside, since you clearly weren't paying any attention, I said that if they didn't focus so intently on the imagery and focused a little more on the memories shared, they could have likely drawn more people in, or even had people crying by the end. As a writer, incorporating more than one things is very important, and they were obviously leaning too heavily on the imagery side, while the imagery itself was sometimes repetitive or redundant. If they gave background to these characters, so we knew what they were like, and what they did, everyone would likely become attached to them and their exploits, so that by the time you got to the end, you're bawling because now you have empathetic feelings rather than a scene with very little to relate to.

As for why SHE won the DD it doesn't really matter to me. Winning a DD is everything and nothing. It's a brief splotlight moment while it can also be the break through people need to get more known. All in all, it's nice, but not that big a deal.

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MerylBenny Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
WOW ! Beautiful Imagination !.. :)
You brought out the essence of WHAT-IS-NEXT eagerness into it..
I enjoyed reading it.. :)
Excellent effort and it came out well too..
I am not a great critic but still I shared what I felt ... 
Keep writing :)
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
Thank you so so much! This is the best comment ever! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. I still feel that I need to tweek it a little but for now I'm happy with it. I can only go up from here. Thank you again! =D!
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MerylBenny Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
Keep writing.. :) I am not a hypocrite and so you can trust my words.. :)
You are really good at writing and I loved the way you imagine things.. :)
Keep up the good work.. ! :)
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
Thank you so much! Your words mean so much to me, I appreciate them very much.
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MerylBenny Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013
:)
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Fairyblush Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so cute and so sad... ;u;
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
It is quite conflicting isn’t it? Thank you for your comment =)
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zWaffle Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lovely and so vivid =3!
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Thank you so much!
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CodyWolf Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
That was amazing!
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Thank you *blush* =)
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CodyWolf Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Your very welcome. :D
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist
Awwwwwww! :icondaawplz:
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murderinslowmotion Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
HaHa, Thank you! =)
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist
=D No thank you for sharing it
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